The Cycle (possible content warning)

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I wrote this very quickly, so it may be rather flawed, but it has some deep meanings, if you'd like to discuss them, then feel free to talk to me. If you'd rather not....well, there's the door.


December 4, 2014 at 8:24am
That was pretty great! Your word choices are grandiose and epic, as always, and I like the social subtext (at least, that's what I THINK you're trying to convey) with the cycle of violence. Honestly, the whole metaphysical implications of "The Cycle" could have been toyed with if this were a longer piece, so I'd really love to see that! This was very brooding, dark and demented, but you could have made it a lot more... ethereal.
December 4, 2014 at 1:36pm
Your praise brings me nothing but pride and joy, my friend.

To be fair, yes I could have focused on the "ethereal" and "metaphysical" aspects of my story, if I had wished to do so. But I think of this story as a piece of cold, hard, reality. Sure, I use a metaphor here or there, but I never try to disguise the horrors of this torturous event.
To me, "the cycle" is not some supernatural thing, it is merely a name for what happened in the past, is happening in the present, and is going to happen in the future. (At least in the context of the story.)
December 3, 2014 at 11:15pm
O_O.... Words can't express what I feel about reading this. I can't even explain it but I understand this yet not at the same time...

But nonetheless, good story X3
December 3, 2014 at 11:52pm
Oh, you have no idea how high you lift my spirits with this kind of praise. Please, tell me what you think of it. What you think it means, or what it means to you. I want to hear your thoughts and opinions.
December 4, 2014 at 1:12am
Okay, but like I said before, I understand and at the same time not, so I'll try to explain what I can...

Well, basically this is about something that most people heard or seen once i their life. Actually, now that I think about it, this thing represents more than I said before.

My first thought was it is about slavery. Here, in what you made, there is a FEMALE tormentor and a MALE being tormented by the former. But that wasn't the case first, it was the other way around. The male being the tormented and the female being tormented. If my memory is good as it was, then I heard that long ago, females where were slaves to males then. I won't pin point where and when though, for my memory is not as good as an Alakazam. Anyways, so yeah, female slaves and master males.

HERE, you made the female rebelled against the male and of course turning her the tormentor, finally decided that enough was enough and the male turned to being the tormented, with the female hurting him like he did to her. And like you said, "The cycle had moved on" meaning the previous one was done BUT a new one will appear.

Second was that, this represents both bullying and karma. ( I'm winging this comment so...) The former you understand that already and the latter being the male finally met the wench karma and he felt the same as the ones he bullied.

Third was the position of both genders. We all know what women are and what they do from long ago. Your work, described the first brutal way of wives standing up against there abusive husbands. Of course what you made here does happen, but not that extreme. Just a slap in face or kick in the place will be enough for them.

And lastly this thing represents what I said from the first one till the last. Rebellion. This, is not far from what rebellion is capable of. It can be as peaceful as a child having a tantrum to something much worse. I won't be defining to much of the latter because it might upset someone here or bring up bad memories or events.

Whew! so... ... yeah, I didn't get understand some of the deepest ones. Hopefully I explained what I think I understand about this...
December 4, 2014 at 2:56am
Woah, that's pretty cool. You've come up with an incredibly well-reasoned set of hypotheses, most of which I never even had the intention of placing into the story.
(Nevertheless, with my astonishment comes a sense of pride, that someone can find so much meaning in this one, incredibly short, work.)

In actuality, I wrote this with the underlying theme of bullying. I tried to imply that in the past, the Boy had been in a position of power (the Tormentor) over the Girl. In other words, he bullied her.
But the story isn't called "the Cycle" for nothing.
The Boy is destined to lose his position of dominance, and indeed, one day the Girl turns the tables on him. Out of desperation, she "steals his strength" as it were, and becomes the strong one. Her attack is just a way of letting him know that he is now the weak one.

The cycle has (inevitably) moved on, as hate can only create hate, and so, the Girl is "Forged anew in the crucible of anger." I tried to show that even though the Girl had become the bully, she still thought it justifiable to hurt him, because He had hurt her. Violence breeds only violence.

Which isn't to say, your interpretation is any less true, valid, or impressive. In fact I like the fact that people think of things differently, even if I was the one that made them.

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